I think it's very good for the first 30 minutes or so up until the bit with the Olympic Torch which feels like it ought to be the resolution of the story - but then suddenly we have the business with the drawing of Chloe's father which doesn't really integrate with the rest of the story as well as it needs to. I can believe that the bit with the Dad was probably intended to be a fundamental part of the story, but something went wrong somewhere and structurally it feels like the story doesn't know when to stop.
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Date: 2023-08-20 10:39 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2023-08-20 10:55 am (UTC)